The only one person
It was on November 24, 2012 when I saw her first and it looked as if the world would have changed completely. I mean I fell in love for with her and I felt as if i could do whatever for her, however difficult it was.
I thought she was beautiful but others said to me that I should wear glasses. Actually, her appearance isn't perfect because her eyes are not big enough, her nose is disappointedly low and she doesn't have golden ratio of the body. But to me, she was so lovely that I could smile whenever we were together. I thought the moment would be forever and we could live happily ever after.
As time went by, she started to take the initiative and exercise power of our relationship. I couldn't do anything without her permission. For example, when I wanted to have Italian food and asked her to have it together, she refused to and ordered other things that I didn't want. Sometimes I considered her as a dictator in our relationship because she had to do whatever she wanted. I wanted to improve the situation because I was not sure if this kind of relationship wouldn't last long. I did't want to lose her.
I started to let her know what couldn't be accepted to me and what made me happy. At first, she hated my behaviors and refused to accept everything. I persuaded her and finally she tried to change her linguistic habits. She used to say "Bring water" but now she says "Can you bring me water, please?" It is not a big deal but it is the beginning of changing. I don't expect that she changes everything I want her to but I know she will try to because we love each other.
When I didn't know her, I thought I knew who I was. But I was wrong. I didn't know myself completely until I knew her. It was she who let me know myself, the world and everything around me. Previously, I didn't know that I was an emotional person and I didn't know that I could laugh such loudly. She taught me everything. It seems that the new world opened as soon as I first met her. She was the only one who changed me.
Her name is Lim Hayun. She is my daughter and 34 months old. She is an only child. She likes to play with a ball and sing a song. She loves her mother's reading a book and always her busy mother. She is the one who makes her parents the real adults.
1. Lim Hayun is the writer's daughter who acts like a dictator to the writer.
ReplyDelete2. Lim Hayun is the writer's daughter who acts like a dictator to the writer.
- The writer has to ask for Hayun's permission for everything.
- Hayun refused to order food that writer wants to eat and ordered the different one.
- Hayun ordered the writer to bring water to her.
3. The writer reveals how the person looks like and what the person does.
- Hayun does not have big eyes, high nose or golden ration of the body.
- Hayun likes playing with a ball and singing.
4. I could understand all description in this essay.
5. I think the writer chose to describe Hayun because she is the most important person in his life since she made him become a real adult and know about what kind of the writer is.
6. I would like to know when the special occasion is that Hayun makes you laugh.
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Hello, my name is Lee Chaehyun.
ReplyDeleteWhat a nice and sweet essay you wrote! But sorry I have to give you a feedback...
1. She is your little daughter who likes to do things in her own way.
2. To others she doesn't look beautiful, but you love her. She refused to listen to your words, and won't let you do things in your way.
3. I can tell what she looks like, and what she says to you, what she does, and what others say about her. Everything on the list is included on your essay!
4. Nope. I guess everything was clear here.
5. Because she is your own(?) daughter, and you thought she was the loveliest person you know.(Just my thoughts!)
6. I was just curious, how did you come up the idea to trick people into believing she is your girlfriend? After I read the last paragraph, I was very surprised. And I think everyone who read your essay would've thought like me. haha Nice way of writing, I like it very much!