Sunday, October 11, 2015

Youjung Kim/First draft of Chapter3 essay/Tues 1p.m.

My father


   My friends' first impression when they first saw my father was mostly like, "Wow, your father is so handsome.", or "Your father looks so young". I have always felt proud of my father, because I knew that he was not like any other fathers. I am blessed to be able to say, "My father is the best father in the world" every time on his birthday.

    My father is lean but muscular. He has played soccer every week for years. I think that is why he is a well-built man for his age. Wrinkles on his face show he is not young, but his eyes are bright and shiny, like young man. His figure and his attitude suggest he is a healthy and lively person. He has a radiant, almost boyish smile on his face, and he makes jokes all the time. Sometimes he tells my family about his old memories, like when he was dating my mother, or when he was a highschool student, which my sister and I enjoy listening to the most.

    He loves to read books, and tries various things in the different fields. His study room is filled with numerous books about different topics. He reads books about science, economics, history and so on. Sometimes he reads books for hours without even taking a short break. As much as he loves gaining knowledge from books, he is a huge fan of music. He listens to classic music in his car and in his office. He even has his own electric piano and guitar, and almost everyday, he practices playing the piano and the guitar on his own.

    I believe his motto in life is happiness. When I was going through a difficult time in highschool, he handed me a book called 'How to be Happy', and even gave me small tips on how to be positive and happy. He would sing a song to me, and say "When you feel down, you should try singing. Singing makes you happy."

    To me, he is a wind, because he reminds me that there is always a fresh breeze blowing on my forehead even in the hardest, toughest time. He once said to me, "Happiness is the most important value in your life. You live, because you want to be happy. You always have to remember things to be grateful about in your life, and try to stay positive no matter what."

    He is an evergreen, because I know he is always there for me, when I need him the most. My sister said to me that his humor never failed to make her happy, and that he is one of the most motivational people in her life.

2 comments:

  1. Hi, I'm Bo-won Kim.
    1. -Writer's father is the best father to the writer. Also he is always there for his daughters.
    2- 1. Writer can say proudly "my fahter is the best father in the world".
    - 2. Writer and the writer's sister said that his humor never failed to make them happy.
    - 3. Writer described her father as an evergreen.
    3. a.writer's father is lean but muscular. He eyes shine brightly and he has wringles.
    b.When the writer was going through hard times, he said to the writer "when you feel down, you should try singing. Singing makes happy."
    c.He plays soccer, loves to read books and listen to music.
    d.writer's friends have said that her father looks very young and handsome.
    4. The part where you said he is wind.
    5. Because writer loves her father.
    6. I want to know more about what you and your father do together.

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  2. 1. The person the writer described in this essay is writer's father who is a motivational person.
    2. The writer's father who is a motivational person.
    - He would sing a song when he feels down.
    - He teaches his daughters to be happy.
    - He tries various things in different fields.
    3. The writer revealed how the person looks like, what the person says, what the person does and what other people say about the person.
    - He is muscular, has bright eyes and boyish smile, and has some wrinkles on his face.
    - He says that "when you feel down, you should try singing because singing makes you feel better and happy," and "happiness is the most important value of our lives."
    - He reads books, plays soccer, listens to music and sings songs.
    - Other people says that he is very handsome and that he looks young.
    4. I could understand the descriptions written in this essay.
    5. I think the writer chose to describe her father because he is a person who's always there for her and makes her happy.
    6. I wonder what kinds of humor he makes to make you happy. I recommend giving some examples of his humor in the next draft.

    - feedback by Sieun Kim

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